Sequence 2 3 - Revision history

Martin at 20:07, 19 July 2007

2007-07-19T20:07:51Z

Martin at 17:45, 8 June 2007

2007-06-08T17:45:45Z

Martin at 16:18, 8 June 2007

2007-06-08T16:18:27Z

Martin at 00:20, 5 June 2007

2007-06-05T00:20:02Z

Martin at 00:17, 5 June 2007

2007-06-05T00:17:39Z

Martin at 21:00, 4 June 2007

2007-06-04T21:00:15Z

Martin at 20:59, 4 June 2007

2007-06-04T20:59:33Z

Martin at 20:51, 4 June 2007

2007-06-04T20:51:43Z

Martin at 20:46, 4 June 2007

2007-06-04T20:46:14Z

Martin at 18:06, 7 April 2007

2007-04-07T18:06:29Z

@@ Line 253: / Line 253: @@
 _03_56
-BIG LOON just starts swells out.
+BIG LOON starts swelling out.
 _03_57

@@ Line 98: / Line 98: @@
 _03_21
-The LOONS make strange noises and bounce excitedly. TIN WOODMAN, SCARECROW, and WOOT look around, concerned for their safety.
+The LOONS make strange noises and bounce excitedly.
 _03_22
@@ Line 105: / Line 108: @@
 _03_23
 BIG LOON (CU)
 tried, condemned and perforated!
 _03_24
 The LOONS cheer lustily, bounce up and down.
 _03_26

@@ Line 157: / Line 157: @@
 _03_36
-LOONS continue to “Woo” reverently until KING BAL holds up a hand ⿿ they stop.
+LOONS continue to “Woo” reverently .
 _03_37
 KING BAL
 Hello again, hello. What’s up now?

@@ Line 221: / Line 221: @@
 BIG LOON
 I could have been King myself, had I wanted to, but I didn’t care for the hard work and responsibility!
 _03_48a
-BIG LOON turns to his audience—suddenly—there’s a sharp explosion—BIG LOON looks panic-stricken—he deflates.
+BIG LOON pops.  What remains on the ground in front of the platform is a heap of flabby, WRINKLED SKIN that looks like a collapsed rubber balloon.
 _03_49

@@ Line 224: / Line 224: @@
 The other LOONS are impressed. They mutter.
 BIG LOON turns to his audience—suddenly—there’s a sharp explosion—BIG LOON looks panic-stricken—he deflates.
@@ Line 230: / Line 231: @@
 _03_49
 SCARECROW, TIN WOODMAN and WOOT react, stunned.
 _03_50
@@ Line 236: / Line 240: @@
 KING BAL
 Hah! Conceited rascal! He puffed himself up until he was bigger than the rest of you, and this is the result of his folly!
 _03_52

@@ Line 4: / Line 4: @@
 _03_01
 TIN WOODMAN, WOOT, followed by SCARECROW, continue hacking their way through the forest.
 _03_03

@@ Line 384: / Line 384: @@
 _03_88
 KING BAL
-Uh-oh⿦
+Uh-oh...
 _03_89
@@ Line 400: / Line 399: @@
 WOOT leaps off the platform—and lunges into the crowd of LOONS. They scream in terror.
-_03_93
+_03_94
-WOOT runs after LOONS.
+WOOT runs after LOONS.  He pricks a LOON in the butt. It squirts off.
 WOOT
-Here ⿿ take that! How do you like it now? Ha!
+Here... Take that! How do you like it now? Ha!
 _03_95
 WOOT pricks another LOON in the butt. It pops.
 _03_97
@@ Line 419: / Line 412: @@
 _03_98
-Only KING BAL remains within reach, seated on his throne with a bewildered look.
+KING BAL remains seated on his throne with a concerned look.
 _03_99
-WOOT grips the thorn and starts for the platform. SCARECROW grabs him.
+WOOT grips the thorn and starts for the platform.
-SCARECROW
+_03_99a
-Enough, Master Woot.
+KING BAL throws his arms in the air in fright.
-WOOT
+_03_102
--01 He would’ve—
+SCARECROW stops WOOT.
 SCARECROW
--02 Let him alone. He seems a good enough king for his peculiar people, and after we are gone, the Loons will have something of a job to pump up all those whom you have punctured.
+Enough, Master Woot.
 _03_101
-KING BAL fumbles with the cord that fastens him to the throne, his eyes on TIN WOODMAN, SCARECROW, and WOOT. He releases it—
+KING BAL unties with the cord that fastens him to the throne.  He floats upward to the leafy dome.
 KING BAL
 -03 Heh-heh. Yes. Heh-heh!
-He floats upward to the leafy dome.
+_03_100
+WOOT faces SCARECROW belligerently… then he lets the anger go… slumps. SCARECROW puts a kindly hand on WOOT’S shoulder.
 WOOT
 Every one of them ought to be exploded!
 _03_103
 TIN WOODMAN
 No. It’s my conclusion that we had no business to intrude here. This is their country, not ours. Come, Woot.
 _03_104
 SCARECROW
 Well said, my friend.

@@ Line 60: / Line 60: @@
 _03_12
 SCARECROW
 Are… are they rubber, do you think?
@@ Line 70: / Line 69: @@
 _03_14
 TIN WOODMAN
 Uh-oh, they⿿ve spotted us.
 SCARECROW
-Eh⿦ Yikes!
+Eh... Yikes!
 _03_15
@@ Line 106: / Line 104: @@
 _03_20
 BIG LOON
 A-ha! Gotcha!
@@ Line 114: / Line 111: @@
 _03_22
 BIG LOON
 -01 Come—bring them to King Bal and have ‘em
@@ Line 161: / Line 157: @@
 _03_34
 KING BAL
 Coming down, everybody! Can you see me? Coming down!
@@ Line 175: / Line 170: @@
 _03_37
 KING BAL
 Hello again, hello. What’s up now?
 _03_38
 BIG LOON
 Strangers, your Majesty—
@@ Line 196: / Line 189: @@
 _03_40
-WOOT looks around. His fear is dissipating.
+WOOT looks around.
 BIG LOON
@@ Line 204: / Line 195: @@
 _03_42
 BIG LOON
 But we mustn’t take chances, must we?
 _03_43
 BIG LOON
 Enough accidents happen to us poor Loons as it is.
@@ Line 234: / Line 223: @@
 _03_47
 BIG LOON
 We made you our King because you have less common sense than the rest of us!
@@ Line 283: / Line 271: @@
 _03_58
 BIG LOON
 Stop!
 _03_59
 KING BAL
 No, no—keep going! Bigger!
 _03_60
@@ Line 301: / Line 285: @@
 _03_62
 KING BAL
 -01 Pride before a pop!
@@ Line 320: / Line 303: @@
 _03_66
 KING BAL
 And now… these intruders DO appear to be proud and puffed up.
 _03_67
 KING BAL
 Perhaps we SHOULD perforate ‘em, eh? What say you?
@@ Line 345: / Line 326: @@
 _03_73
 SCARECROW (CU)
 Hoo-hoo! (frightened)
@@ Line 362: / Line 342: @@
 _03_77
-THORN LOON jabs TIN WOODMAN.
+THORN LOON perpares to jab TIN WOODMAN.
 _03_78
-CU: THORN thunks against TIN WOODMAN’s body.
+THORN LOON thunks against TIN WOODMAN's leg.  THORN thunks against TIN WOODMAN’s body.
 _03_79
@@ Line 374: / Line 354: @@
 _03_80
-The LOONS react with a cry of outrage. The LOON with the thorn looks around. Obviously, he thinks he’s going to get blamed for this. The mood grows ugly.
+The LOONS react with a cry of outrage. The LOON with the thorn looks around. Obviously, he thinks he’s going to get blamed for this.
 LOONS
@@ Line 380: / Line 360: @@
 _03_81
 KING BAL
 What is it? Dull or something?
@@ Line 386: / Line 365: @@
 _03_82
 The LOON with the thorn is desperate. He jabs the thorn into WOOT’S leg.
 WOOT
@@ Line 396: / Line 373: @@
 LOON
--01 Ooof—
+-01 Ooof!
 The kicked LOON explodes with a loud pop.

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@@ Line 365: / Line 365: @@
 _03_78
-CU: The thorn thunks against TIN WOODMAN’s body.
+CU: THORN thunks against TIN WOODMAN’s body.
 _03_79